Writing+Assignment+No.+1

Please read the following five writing segments. Select two segments and provide the writer with your feedback regarding writing style, content and structure. Limit your comments to less than fifty words. In your review refer to segments as writer no 1, no. 2, etc. Please post your replies under Writing Assignment No. 1 discussion. You can also respond to a reply

**Writer No. 1**

The purpose of music in my life is a multifaceted one. It has grown from my different musical experiences and made me who I am. My parents have been known to say that I live and breathe music, which is true in the sense that I need music to survive. I do not know what I would do if for some reason I could not play music ever again. It allows me to break down my comfort barrier and expose myself to criticism. Without it I would not have met any of the amazing people I have and my life would be very different. Music’s purpose to me is that it is a clear, defined passion that provides me with comfort, stability and dependability when I need it and has given me a goal around which to base my life.

**Writer No. 2** Music plays many roles in my life. It supports and enforces skills like relationship building, learning and comprehension, and it is also used as mere entertainment. Developing relationships with my friends and also meeting new friends is very important to me. Through music I get to interact with people who have similar characteristics and get to know them well. Some of my skills that were developed through music and band are: leadership, teamwork, listening and performance. These are all skills that will benefit me later in life. I have learned a lot through music but more importantly I have learned how to learn. What I mean by this is that my techniques and skills at learning music are applicable in other subjects. I listen to music for many reasons; to either change or understand my mood, to have an understanding of the music and as entertainment. Last but not least I am involved in music to have fun with friends. These are all reasons that show the purpose of music in my life.

**Writer No. 3** There are many different purposes for music in my life, each one being just as important as the next. Music is beautiful to me, and I strive to nurture my gift every day. It serves as my anchor, keeping me grounded in everything that I do, and it gives balance to many different areas of my life, not just performance. Music also serves as my wings, flying me to new heights, and is a means of personal growth. Through my experience with it, I have grown much more as a person than I could have ever done without it. Music has given me a new way to relate with others. In many ways it is similar to a new language. It is a joy to be able to talk to others who think in similar ways to yourself, and respond in a like-minded way. Those are music’s purposes for me.

**Writer No. 4** There are many different purposes for music in my life. One of the main purposes was to indentify myself with in the community I had recently moved into. Along with this identification also comes the ability to meet many interesting people. This makes my parents proud and gives me people to look up to. One of music’s other purposes is to remind me that the world is not all going to pieces if there is still music around whether it’s just two rocks banging together to create a beat. Music also shows me that there is one true constant in the world even if it’s all going to the proverbial dogs. Lastly, the main purpose of music in my life is to allow me to be around a group of people with similar interests and skills.

**Writer No. 5** Music surges through my veins and my personality. It’s a creative outlet for the brain where I can escape reality through my instruments. Studies show that playing music improves skills like math, time organization and memorization. It’s an opportunity to be professional. I partially owe my academic success to my musicianship. Music is also a legitimate excuse to regularly don a tuxedo. Music improves my confidence. I feel accomplished after a successful performance. It makes me unique and allows me to meet virtuous people. This has lead to memorable experiences as a conductor, composer and NBYO member. Music is entertaining. I periodically enjoy orchestra rehearsals or practicing piano. The thrill of fabulous pieces, fine dress and performance with my peers is amazing. Music keeps me alive with a purpose. I am working hard for an education and a good job. Once I achieve that, I can start to actually pursue music.